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Hey, This is in no way a complete script, rather just a sample of a scene I have wrote so that I able to understand if it is formated correctly, right angles and interesting

TUMBLER FULL OF SCOTCH

EXTREME CLOSEUP.The Scotch dark and inviting.... The ice moves slightly in the glass.The tumbler is Crystal, it looks heavy this is a refined mans drink. We hold on this image for a few beats we are thinking is this a god damn Whiskey commercial

A new angle we can see that the tumbler is resting on a chair arm. It's dark but we can make out,barely a man late 40's, pale complexion, straggly medium length hair and Grey icy eyes is sitting in the armchair.He is facing toward something we haven't seen yet.He is not the man to drink out of such a glass.

His name is MURPHY

URPHYS FACE

CLOSEUP. His skin is tired, and he has stubble, thick Grey stubble. His mouth is criss crossed with age lines.

Slightly closer on MURPHYS eyes. The pupils are dilated, he appears to be staring ....

What Do You Think Of This Script?

Although you have good ideas, your presentation is the concern.

Keep in mind that no matter what you may write, the director is free to take their own interpretation of the scene.

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What Do You Think Of This Script?

Sounds intriguing

What Do You Think Of This Script?

Sounds intriguing! I would like to read more.

What Do You Think Of This Script?

You started this, now we need to hear more!!!

Looks like you may have some talent there. Keep it up!!

What Do You Think Of This Script?

It is intriguing. Please tell me more.